59 - The Royal Family, part 4

August 24th, 2019, 7:45 am

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Reply pipipipi, August 24th, 2019, 7:45 am

Hello... OK I swear this is the last of the... "build up" updates. I really wanted to draw this. My pain, allow me to share them...

(by the way, Fire Emblem Three Houses is incredible. I'm losing all my free time into this game. Help me)

See you next month!

Special thanks to my beta readers: @Aozora210 and Ray!

Also, convention announcement [Indonesia]:
I would be coming to Comic Frontier / Comifuro 13 next month! My stuff will be at booth F13ab, Sunday only. More info will be on my twitter @piyostoria!
...ok, I'd be there mostly for my office work, so I probably won't be around to chat... But my stuff will be there at that booth ;w;

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User's Comments:

Reply 9rainbowtails, August 24th, 2019, 10:02 am

N, you’re about to be stabbed in the back

Reply ZeroProStudio, August 24th, 2019, 11:10 am

;;;A;;;;

Reply Truefan108, August 24th, 2019, 12:15 pm

Oh no! N thinks he's still alive.

Reply SentryBeat, August 24th, 2019, 2:32 pm

@9rainbowtails: i really hope thats whats gonna happen

Reply darth deebious the wise, August 24th, 2019, 3:08 pm

Is Zoroark gonna do a bad thing?
I once did a bad thing
I regret the thing I did...

Reply AndreTheLugia, August 24th, 2019, 8:06 pm

Ooo.. stubborn to the heart, a stone heart I might say..

Reply Mystic Fire (Guest), August 25th, 2019, 3:27 pm

I licked on this excited as hell and now I might actually cry

N you poor manipulated baby

Reply sakohju, August 25th, 2019, 11:35 pm

Zoroark: You're the younger brother
N: no YOU'RE the younger brother
Pi: *walks in*
Pi: Is this a bad time I can come back later

Reply Rubombee, August 26th, 2019, 2:57 am

this is going to be very sad

Reply JustARandomKid (Guest), August 26th, 2019, 9:57 am

AHHHHH @pipipi
This page isn't loading! Please, if you can, help!

Reply pipipipi, August 26th, 2019, 6:56 pm

@JustARandomKid: hello, sorry I don't know anything since I just directly upload it to SJ >< try opening with a different browser or device? If it still can't work, I'll try uploading somewhere else..

Reply eworm, August 27th, 2019, 4:56 am

As someone who's been following this comic pretty much since the start (and even shares the birthday with it), I feel obligated to post a thorough comment here, at the endgame.

This comic drew me in with the artstyle. I love chibi-esque simplicity and expressiveness, especially when combined with some good humor. A black-and-white comic also runs a risk of getting too detail-busy for the readers' eyes, what with the colors not helping distinct between the drawn elements, but that didn't happen here. Everything was clean and clear.

Just like the art style, the storytelling was also "minimalistic" in a way. No elaborate backstories, no special character arc for every team member, just hitting the in-game story's beats (and the Nuzlocke's) and coloring them with the reactions of Pi and her crew.

As we're nearing the end, my feelings are mixed though.

The art drops the chibi-ness to look more serious for the sake of the plot, yet it gets increasingly sketch-looking, thus looking somewhat less serious than what came before. Like an art style that would be saved for quick extra content or something. It doesn't look bad per se, and I understand the need to save time, but in my eyes it kinda feels like the art is fighting itself. It's trying to be quick and simple, yet also to be serious and epic for the finish...

I hope this doesn't come across as harsh criticism, because I don't want to be harsh or even to criticize - just to make my impressions known. As a crappy artist myself, I would definitely appreciate a comment like this, so I hope your reaction is similar to what mine would've been.

The second "fault" I would point out is Pi herself. As the final conflict was from the very start meant to be her battle with N, it makes sense that N was one of the few characters explored and developed more thoroughly... And yet it doesn't feel like Pi received a similar treatment. Her humorous overreactions and occassional cluelessness are entertaining character traits and would be enough if the comic stayed a simplistic comedy, but now she's gonna fight for the sake of the world and... I don't really know why. It's not inherently bad to have the protagonist be forced into the conflict by external circumstances, but at the very end the motivation of "I must win or the world ends" is not a character-specific one. Any NPC trainer could replace Pi here, drive-wise. At this point Zoroark, Concordia and Anthea, N's family, all have genuine, personal reasons to try to stop N, while Pi, N's supposed nemesis, doesn't really. Heck, Cheren would have a personal gripe against N at this point, seeing as he thrashed Alder, both Cheren's idol and someone he wanted to best first. Pi is just kinda along for the ride and while I don't doubt her determination, the fact is isn't just her own, kinda lowers the stakes for me.

Unless you're planning to have N and Pi realize mid-battle that they were both essentially manipulated into this fight "for the sake of the world" and have the two actually have a ceasefire before anyone gets hurt. And then Reshiram and Zekrom turn out to be a-holes and start wrecking Unova, so that Pi teams up with Team Plasma to actually save the world and BIANCA'S STICK SAVES THE DAY.

Or maybe the day is saved by the characters from your Greek Mythology comic making an out-of-nowhere return.

Either way, can't wait for the finale.

(By the way these Colress strips I've only just found on your tumblr really prove to me that your calling is comedy and shame on you for not sharing them with your readers here)

Reply VaporeonGamer, August 27th, 2019, 10:17 am

@eworm: #biancastick4life

Reply pipipipi, August 31st, 2019, 5:22 am

@eworm: wow, haha that is very detailed. Well... all I can say is, thank you for your feedback! Things are still developing, so I hope you look forward to see what I've planned in future updates :D

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